As one amateur to another, try to avoid feathering in (it's a difficult skill to master) - far better to butt up where you can and easi-fill/sand down if necessary. Hopefully you've finished your render 3-4mm back from the adjacent plaster? You need to consider the vertical join between the new blockwork and old brickwork which is prone to cracking (especially if not keyed in), as is that area round the lintel - I would have hacked back some of the existing plaster and set some mesh in there to bridge it or dabbed some plasterboard over it.
As to the application of the render, thin layers can be helpful for us beginners, but equally important is not overworking it - this is what makes it fall off - you need to push the render onto the wall, try to get it as flat as you can with a few strokes and then leave it - whatever state it's in. Hard to know when to start the next coat, but if the first coat moves when you try it's too soon. If you leave it overnight (often not a bad option) don't forget to PVA again and be wary that a very thin skim of render onto a set background can be hard work if you have the quite coarse building sand we seem to get these days.
I have absolutely no skill, but manage to achieve near millimeter perfect results on some doggy old walls just using screeds and bays:
This one was over 40mm out from top to bottom, did the screeds one day and filled in the next in two coats:
I have a go at most trades, but plastering is the only one that requires any real skill, so if you haven't got it you need to cheat - easi-fill, sanding down, speed skim and plazi-flex etc. There's a few other things I'm going to look into for my next project (skimming half my house) - extratime plaster retarder, possibly a sponge float and it all goes really wrong - "roll on" plaster!!
Remember, it's always the finish that counts, not how you achieved it. Sometimes, professional techniques are just too difficult to master, however if you can do that snazzy thing where you can spread it going backwards and forwards with your trowel (as opposed to someone who can only smear it one way) you're onto a winner - apparently it's all in the wrist action!